The following post is a critique of two of my fellow students’ photojournalism posts.
Megan Elliot – Megan’s feature photo, “Going to Class”, captures a scene that strongly represents life as a college student in Laramie. But it’s a tad impersonal. I’m not sure which of the two people I’m suppose to focus on. It would be nice to see a face as well for a feature shot. However, the focus is very sharp and the pathway creates a strong leading line through the photo.
My favorite part of “Game”, the sports feature photo, is how the photo captures the imminent collision of the two sets of players. The competitive spirit of the game comes across well. I think cropping could have been utilized. For example, the two heads at the bottom of the pic are distracting as well as the down marker sign on the left. Cropping could have helped place even more emphasis on the players.
“Shooting Pool” and “Magic 8 Ball” both have a definite subject and take advantage of the rule of thirds. Placing the subject on the thirds line helps draw more attention to the subject. The photos also capture the fun of a night out. However, a more interesting composition may have come from shooting right at the table’s edge. This photo could have shown the expression on the subject’s face and possibly eliminate some of the distractions in the background. A date and place are missing from the photos’ captions too.
I like the leading lines in the photos created by the subject. The lines let the viewer know that the subject is about to strike the pool balls.
Finally, I looked at “Cowboys.” This photo does a good job of illustrating the atmosphere at a football game. Nothing is more synonymous with football than cheerleaders. It might have been cool to try to shoot the photo from right up against the fence. This would have created an interesting viewpoint by shooting up at the cheerleaders but having the crowd in the background helps show the atmosphere at the game too. Even though it’s obvious that the photo was taken at War Memorial stadium, the caption still needs a date and place.
Alex Edwards – The first photo I looked at was Alex’s sports feature, “Brown and Gold Spirit.” I like how he caught the flag in motion and the expression on the subject’s face which really shows her spirit. I’m not sure if this really qualifies as a sports feature though. It’s certainly related to a sporting event, but I guess I don’t really know if athletes had to be represented in the picture or not. Also, I think the word “our” in the caption might be out of place. Journalists tend to avoiding using first person plural in photo captions. The colors in the photo are very vibrant though, and the exposure is sharp.
I like the feature photo “Mom, can I touch the chickens.” The little girl’s curiosity and interest in the chickens is very apparent. It might have been cool to see her face too, but I’m not sure there was angle where this could be done and still have the chickens in the picture. The photo also creates a strong relationship between the subject and the background.
Another photo I enjoyed was “Where did the football go?” It’s a good action shot and really captures the moment. The people in the background are sort of distracting, and the football is a little too blurry although this does show the motion. And there is a strong vector created between the subject and the ball. Once again, I think the first person should be avoided in the caption to keep in line with the journalistic approach to the assignment.
Lastly, I looked at “Yummy!” This is an all-around fun photo that does a good job of showing the feelings of the subject. The focus is excellent and the child’s eyes really stand out.